leigh57: (8x16 Renee Promise)
leigh57 ([personal profile] leigh57) wrote2010-09-19 05:35 pm
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Not that anybody should believe me even a little...

Shamelessly adapted from [livejournal.com profile] sardonicynic's recent post:

Pick a character or pairing from 24 (sorry to be so specific, but it's where my brain is right now), give me some a song lyric, and I will attempt at least 100 words of fic for you.

I know. I didn't write any of them last time. So I understand if you're all just like, PFT. However, my brain is in this mood where it just can't settle down, and I'd really like to find out if I'm capable of writing anything that doesn't turn into a thousand words minimum. I'm teaching all week, so I can mess with these at work, too:)

I think I'll cap it at 12 though, because even that's probably ambitious, given my recent success with prompts.

Crystal, I'm so excited to prompt you I'm squeaking;)
ext_450096: (Meh Renee after Hassan)

Re: Renee/Larry [Any place except your heart]

[identity profile] adrenalin211.livejournal.com 2010-09-20 11:54 pm (UTC)(link)
I really liked this. "Whatever time is" and "Skin doesn't rip here" and how it's so viscerally in present tense.

I love Larry so much. I love your line about how much he cared about what happened to Renee AND Jack, because I think he really would, and I think he WOULD feel better to have her where he can keep a protective eye on her, even though the whole idea is ludicrous because they're fucking dead and ...

This whole thing seems so WELL thought out in the way that it so perfectly doesn't quite make sense. It feels real. Like the coffee and the idea of being in this perfect place but not having perfect emotions to go along with it. Clocks everywhere, but time doesn't matter. That she calls life "home" and she misses it, and the bathrobe and wanting to see blood. The emotions are just so ALIVE in her and it's all so perfectly contradictory, you know?

This is just SO FLIPPIN' COOL IS WHAT I MEAN TO SAY! Thank you for sharing, bb.

Meh. How come I don't have a Larry icon that's not silly?
ext_407935: (8x10 Renee phone)

Re: Renee/Larry [Any place except your heart]

[identity profile] leigh57.livejournal.com 2010-09-21 12:19 am (UTC)(link)
Aw, bb. You're even commenting on my zany flashfic here? (And thank you in advance for your epic review of my action attempt -- response to that coming!) Augh the things I'd go back and change now. I am NOT cut out for this type of writing. But in any case, I'm super glad you liked the premise, weird though it is. I should probably be disturbed by how much sense it makes in my head. I'm glad that the dissonance between normal and really not normal worked, because that's what I was going for.

I don't have a Larry icon that isn't silly either. And the more time that passes, the more I love him, so I probably need to remedy that. I should get a good cap from when he had to tell Renee about Jack. His little face. MEEP!!!