Fic: Alphabet Meme Round One -- SVU
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P is for: popcorn. SVU; Elliot/Olivia, forlauridsen09 725 words
I is for: independent. SVU; Elliot/Olivia, forhollywdliz 813 words
W is for: waiting. SVU; Elliot/Kathy, forlowriseflare 617 words
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When she’s done puking by the stairs, reasonably confident that her stomach isn’t going to start up again, they get back in the car.
She chews the gum Elliot handed her – some sort of violent mint that isn’t necessarily improving her situation, but he meant well, so.
Despite his smartass comment about crying in baseball, she knows he’s worried. He keeps checking the mirrors as if the Church Lady might have appeared there since he looked two seconds ago. His eyes never rest in one spot for more than a beat, and the muscle in the side of his neck is tense, tight.
She wishes he’d give her a little more credit. She can take a punch, literal or figurative, and the fact that this case has gotten to her more than most doesn’t change that.
She snaps her gum, loud, the way she used to on the way to school to piss her mom off.
“You must be feeling better,” Elliot observes. His eyes are back on the road before she can turn her head. “You sound like Maureen.”
“I told you. I’m fine.”
She fiddles with her chapstick and turns on the radio. The volume is up so high she pushes her back into the seat in surprise. The Backstreet Boys croon, “I Want It That Way.”
“Didn’t know you were a fan.” She grins at him and snaps the gum again.
“Shut up.”
He makes a right without signaling, but she can see his shoulders beginning to relax.
“I got so sick of fighting with Maureen and Kathleen that I gave up.” He pauses, then smirks. “I had this fucking song stuck in my head for three days last week.”
Her stomach’s settling, and she tries to concentrate on the road – hum of the tires, shine of the taillights ahead – so her mind won’t replay the conversation that made her vomit.
Elliot reaches out and twists the volume button to the left. “We’ll get them,” he says, his voice low but filled with that cocky confidence she wishes she could purchase in the candy aisle at 7-11. She pictures it in a shiny package, next to the Snickers and Whatchamacallits.
“I know.” She snaps her gum one more time and turns the radio back up. Tapping her elbow into his arm, she adds, “It’s okay. I don’t hate this song either.”
“Better than that Eminem asshole.” He shakes his head and changes lanes too fast, but she can see the edge of his mouth tilt up.
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“If I don’t get some sleep soon I’m gonna throw up again,” she grumbles, rubbing her temple with ink-smudged fingers.
Elliot glances up, squinting. “Why don’t you grab a couple hours in the crib?”
He’s clicking the tip of his pen in that spastic way he does when he’s running on adrenaline, caffeine, and Munchkins. She sort of wants to hit him, but he looks pathetic. It would take too much energy anyway.
“Because if we work on this for two more hours, we’ll be done.” She takes a swig of her 7-Up, which is already going flat from sitting on her desk too long. The sugar leaves an aftertaste. She should have gotten diet.
“Weren’t you supposed to have dinner with that Bruce guy tonight?” Elliot taps a few keys and hits return more forcefully than necessary. “The one who writes operas?”
“He composes soundtracks, jackass.” She kicks him under the desk. “And yes, I was. I’m so glad I get to sit here and listen to you click your pen instead.” She tries to look pissed, but really, she’s just too tired.
He pushes out of his chair, the wheels squeaking as they spin. “I’ll be back in a second.”
“Can’t wait,” she mutters, flipping open the file in front of her and trying to bring the fuzzy letters into focus.
She’s been through three more files (still nothing) when she smells popcorn. Elliot sits down across from her and extends the bag, open but still steaming. “Peace offering,” he says, shooting her that obnoxious grin he knows will get him off the hook. “I’m sure Bruce is a great guy.”
“Thanks.” She stuffs a few kernels into her mouth and adds, “Also, bite me.”
Elliot laughs and settles back into his chair.
She notices he’s stopped clicking the pen.
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It’s one of those days when heat shimmers off the sidewalk in translucent waves before you have time to finish your coffee, which naturally means that the air conditioning in the bullpen is set to something like 55. Nonetheless, Elliot rolls up his sleeves before they head into Interrogation Two for a chat with the expensively dressed grey-haired businessman who happens to be their prime suspect in the rapes of four teenage girls.
Olivia notices the perp wears the same cologne one of her mom’s boyfriends used to wear, the one who listened to Elvis’s gospel records and always wanted to cook dinner at their apartment.
Elliot’s on the offensive from the second they walk in the door, kinetic energy and perpetual motion. He violates the man’s personal space so much even she’s starting to feel agitated.
“Where did you say you went after drinks with this ’friend’ of yours?” Elliot asks. Olivia can practically see the sarcastic imaginary quotes, as if they’re hanging in the air a little to the left of Elliot’s head. His voice is very low, and most people would probably take that to mean he’s calm.
Most people would be wrong.
“Did you forget your medication this morning?” Mr. Manning (that’s the grey-haired guy’s name) mutters, staring at his own fingers splayed on the silver table in front of him.
“Excuse me?” Elliot’s almost snarling.
She closes her eyes for a second and squeezes her palms shut. Shit. Ever since the separation, Elliot’s transitioned from being more easily pissed off than your average person to . . . whatever the hell this is, the thing where he goes from zero to Mach 2 in half a second and all she has is whiplash.
She doesn’t need this shit. She hasn’t even had her second cup of coffee.
But Elliot’s lunging for Manning, his hand already on the man’s shirt collar. Instinctively, Olivia maneuvers her body between him and the suspect, so that instead of careening toward the perp, Elliot’s head almost collides with hers before he realizes she’s there and snaps backwards, regaining control of his body.
She stares at him, watching the vein in his temple throb. No one speaks. After a few seconds, Elliot must notice that his fingers are clutching the Manning’s collar, and he releases the fabric, stepping back several paces until he’s leaning against the wall.
“I’m gonna go get us some coffee, and then we’ll start again, Mr. Manning,” he says, the icy snark back in his delivery.
Olivia glimpses Cragen’s face when Elliot opens the door. He doesn’t look happy.
“You’re lucky I’m in a good mood this morning, Detective Benson,” says Manning, his tone so creepy it makes her shiver under the goosebumps that already decorate her arms. “Or I might have to file a complaint.”
She looks at the door and wonders if Cragen is ripping Elliot a new one right now. “Why don’t you shut up and we’ll start from the beginning, okay?”
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By evening, Elliot appears to have simmered down. He’s relaxed in his chair, chewing on a pen while he leafs through a file. The back of his neck is sweating, and she catches herself following the moisture as it disappears below his collar, wondering what it looks like on the muscles of his back.
What the hell?
She needs to work less and get laid more. Or at least spend more time with her vibrator and that warming gel she spent too much money on at Megan’s ridiculous sex toy party last week.
She stands by the coffeemaker, carafe tipped toward her cup. Lately, dealing with Elliot reminds her of those Choose Your Own Adventure books she used to leaf through when she baby-sit in high school. The difference is that on a bad day, any approach to Elliot can land her on the metaphorical equivalent of the “Sorry, you’re dead” page.
She can’t predict him anymore, and it freaks the hell out of her. It also makes it hard to do her job.
She’s not sure which is worse.
Screw it. She pours her coffee and walks to their desks, where he’s still munching on the pen. It has tiny dents in the white plastic.
“Do you want to get some dinner or were you going to go-” She catches herself before she says home, because she knows that’s not the word he’d choose for his barely furnished studio. “Were you gonna get out of here?” She sips her coffee. She’s still freezing.
He surprises her by throwing the file on his desk and getting up without hesitation. “Fuck this. I’m so tired I can’t read. We should try that new Indian place Morrison’s always talking about.”
He follows her through the doors, close like always. Probably no closer than usual, but for some reason, she’s warm before they even reach the elevator.
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“You want the Sprite or the Diet Coke? They were out of everything else.”
Kathy looks up from the three-month-old issue of People she probably wasn’t reading. “Diet Coke.” She takes the can and pops the top, drinking a few large swallows before she asks, “What’d the doctor say about Olivia?”
Elliot shrugs out of his trench coat, inhaling the combination of bleach and stale coffee that permeates the hospital waiting room. “They don’t know anything new.”
He sits down. God he’s so fucking tired. “She has a concussion. They’re running a few more tests to make sure it’s nothing worse.” He sighs, running his hands over his chin and trying to remember the last time he shaved. Tuesday maybe? “You know more about this stuff than I do.”
“El, it’s standard procedure. CT and MRI to make sure there’s no skull fracture or bleeding in her brain.” She’s looking right at him, and no matter how hard he searches, the only thing he can find in her eyes is concern. He wonders when the hell that happened, when they all accepted this for what it is.
Kathy sips her soda and flips through the magazine. Something about the Kardashian sisters. He settles into one of the cheaply upholstered taupe chairs, leaving a seat between them because her purse and a stuffed manila folder occupy that space. He twists a button on his shirt and finally picks up the B section of the Times, three days old.
“Did they say when you can see her?” Kathy’s leafing through the contents of the folder now, not looking at him.
“Probably a few hours. I guess the MRI takes a while.”
“Yeah.” She flips the file shut and reaches for her purse. “Unless you want me to stay, I’m gonna help Maureen with that blood drive she’s trying to organize.” Kathy pauses, as if she’s not sure whether to stop or continue speaking. “I don’t know if she’s talked to you, but she’s pretty stressed out about it.”
He’s silent. Maureen hasn’t said a word about the blood drive, probably because whenever she’s called lately he’s talked to her for two minutes and then made some excuse to hang up. He makes himself look at Kathy. “I’ll call her tonight.”
“Thanks.” She rummages in her purse and pulls out pale pink lipstick, which she applies without even looking in a mirror. He’s seen Olivia with lipstick, but he blanks on whether he’s ever witnessed her in the act of applying it. “Call me if anything changes and I’ll come right back.” Kathy leans forward and drops a kiss on his forehead, gesture of habit so ingrained it’s meaningless.
“Okay. I’m only gonna stay here until they let me see her.”
She smiles. “It’s just me and Eli tonight, so if you can’t make it for dinner, it’s fine.”
She walks past him, taking with her the same citrus scent she’s worn since he met her in high school. He remembers the first time he came inside her, the crazy rush, his face in her neck, gasping with release and euphoria as he breathed in the smell he had no way of knowing then he’d associate with her forever.
He’s glad now that he didn’t know anything, then.
He swallows half the Sprite in a few gulps; the carbonation stings as it goes down. Then he fits himself into the chair as best he can and waits for the doctor to materialize and tell him he can talk to Olivia.
It’s not comfortable – the cushion’s too soft and the metal structure behind the upholstery pushes his back the wrong way.
It works for now.
He waits some more.
adrenalin211, thank you for the reassurance, the super-quick beta, and for listening to my insane London babble all day:)P is for: popcorn. SVU; Elliot/Olivia, for
lauridsen09 725 wordsI is for: independent. SVU; Elliot/Olivia, for
hollywdliz 813 wordsW is for: waiting. SVU; Elliot/Kathy, for
lowriseflare 617 words*********************************************************
When she’s done puking by the stairs, reasonably confident that her stomach isn’t going to start up again, they get back in the car.
She chews the gum Elliot handed her – some sort of violent mint that isn’t necessarily improving her situation, but he meant well, so.
Despite his smartass comment about crying in baseball, she knows he’s worried. He keeps checking the mirrors as if the Church Lady might have appeared there since he looked two seconds ago. His eyes never rest in one spot for more than a beat, and the muscle in the side of his neck is tense, tight.
She wishes he’d give her a little more credit. She can take a punch, literal or figurative, and the fact that this case has gotten to her more than most doesn’t change that.
She snaps her gum, loud, the way she used to on the way to school to piss her mom off.
“You must be feeling better,” Elliot observes. His eyes are back on the road before she can turn her head. “You sound like Maureen.”
“I told you. I’m fine.”
She fiddles with her chapstick and turns on the radio. The volume is up so high she pushes her back into the seat in surprise. The Backstreet Boys croon, “I Want It That Way.”
“Didn’t know you were a fan.” She grins at him and snaps the gum again.
“Shut up.”
He makes a right without signaling, but she can see his shoulders beginning to relax.
“I got so sick of fighting with Maureen and Kathleen that I gave up.” He pauses, then smirks. “I had this fucking song stuck in my head for three days last week.”
Her stomach’s settling, and she tries to concentrate on the road – hum of the tires, shine of the taillights ahead – so her mind won’t replay the conversation that made her vomit.
Elliot reaches out and twists the volume button to the left. “We’ll get them,” he says, his voice low but filled with that cocky confidence she wishes she could purchase in the candy aisle at 7-11. She pictures it in a shiny package, next to the Snickers and Whatchamacallits.
“I know.” She snaps her gum one more time and turns the radio back up. Tapping her elbow into his arm, she adds, “It’s okay. I don’t hate this song either.”
“Better than that Eminem asshole.” He shakes his head and changes lanes too fast, but she can see the edge of his mouth tilt up.
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“If I don’t get some sleep soon I’m gonna throw up again,” she grumbles, rubbing her temple with ink-smudged fingers.
Elliot glances up, squinting. “Why don’t you grab a couple hours in the crib?”
He’s clicking the tip of his pen in that spastic way he does when he’s running on adrenaline, caffeine, and Munchkins. She sort of wants to hit him, but he looks pathetic. It would take too much energy anyway.
“Because if we work on this for two more hours, we’ll be done.” She takes a swig of her 7-Up, which is already going flat from sitting on her desk too long. The sugar leaves an aftertaste. She should have gotten diet.
“Weren’t you supposed to have dinner with that Bruce guy tonight?” Elliot taps a few keys and hits return more forcefully than necessary. “The one who writes operas?”
“He composes soundtracks, jackass.” She kicks him under the desk. “And yes, I was. I’m so glad I get to sit here and listen to you click your pen instead.” She tries to look pissed, but really, she’s just too tired.
He pushes out of his chair, the wheels squeaking as they spin. “I’ll be back in a second.”
“Can’t wait,” she mutters, flipping open the file in front of her and trying to bring the fuzzy letters into focus.
She’s been through three more files (still nothing) when she smells popcorn. Elliot sits down across from her and extends the bag, open but still steaming. “Peace offering,” he says, shooting her that obnoxious grin he knows will get him off the hook. “I’m sure Bruce is a great guy.”
“Thanks.” She stuffs a few kernels into her mouth and adds, “Also, bite me.”
Elliot laughs and settles back into his chair.
She notices he’s stopped clicking the pen.
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It’s one of those days when heat shimmers off the sidewalk in translucent waves before you have time to finish your coffee, which naturally means that the air conditioning in the bullpen is set to something like 55. Nonetheless, Elliot rolls up his sleeves before they head into Interrogation Two for a chat with the expensively dressed grey-haired businessman who happens to be their prime suspect in the rapes of four teenage girls.
Olivia notices the perp wears the same cologne one of her mom’s boyfriends used to wear, the one who listened to Elvis’s gospel records and always wanted to cook dinner at their apartment.
Elliot’s on the offensive from the second they walk in the door, kinetic energy and perpetual motion. He violates the man’s personal space so much even she’s starting to feel agitated.
“Where did you say you went after drinks with this ’friend’ of yours?” Elliot asks. Olivia can practically see the sarcastic imaginary quotes, as if they’re hanging in the air a little to the left of Elliot’s head. His voice is very low, and most people would probably take that to mean he’s calm.
Most people would be wrong.
“Did you forget your medication this morning?” Mr. Manning (that’s the grey-haired guy’s name) mutters, staring at his own fingers splayed on the silver table in front of him.
“Excuse me?” Elliot’s almost snarling.
She closes her eyes for a second and squeezes her palms shut. Shit. Ever since the separation, Elliot’s transitioned from being more easily pissed off than your average person to . . . whatever the hell this is, the thing where he goes from zero to Mach 2 in half a second and all she has is whiplash.
She doesn’t need this shit. She hasn’t even had her second cup of coffee.
But Elliot’s lunging for Manning, his hand already on the man’s shirt collar. Instinctively, Olivia maneuvers her body between him and the suspect, so that instead of careening toward the perp, Elliot’s head almost collides with hers before he realizes she’s there and snaps backwards, regaining control of his body.
She stares at him, watching the vein in his temple throb. No one speaks. After a few seconds, Elliot must notice that his fingers are clutching the Manning’s collar, and he releases the fabric, stepping back several paces until he’s leaning against the wall.
“I’m gonna go get us some coffee, and then we’ll start again, Mr. Manning,” he says, the icy snark back in his delivery.
Olivia glimpses Cragen’s face when Elliot opens the door. He doesn’t look happy.
“You’re lucky I’m in a good mood this morning, Detective Benson,” says Manning, his tone so creepy it makes her shiver under the goosebumps that already decorate her arms. “Or I might have to file a complaint.”
She looks at the door and wonders if Cragen is ripping Elliot a new one right now. “Why don’t you shut up and we’ll start from the beginning, okay?”
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By evening, Elliot appears to have simmered down. He’s relaxed in his chair, chewing on a pen while he leafs through a file. The back of his neck is sweating, and she catches herself following the moisture as it disappears below his collar, wondering what it looks like on the muscles of his back.
What the hell?
She needs to work less and get laid more. Or at least spend more time with her vibrator and that warming gel she spent too much money on at Megan’s ridiculous sex toy party last week.
She stands by the coffeemaker, carafe tipped toward her cup. Lately, dealing with Elliot reminds her of those Choose Your Own Adventure books she used to leaf through when she baby-sit in high school. The difference is that on a bad day, any approach to Elliot can land her on the metaphorical equivalent of the “Sorry, you’re dead” page.
She can’t predict him anymore, and it freaks the hell out of her. It also makes it hard to do her job.
She’s not sure which is worse.
Screw it. She pours her coffee and walks to their desks, where he’s still munching on the pen. It has tiny dents in the white plastic.
“Do you want to get some dinner or were you going to go-” She catches herself before she says home, because she knows that’s not the word he’d choose for his barely furnished studio. “Were you gonna get out of here?” She sips her coffee. She’s still freezing.
He surprises her by throwing the file on his desk and getting up without hesitation. “Fuck this. I’m so tired I can’t read. We should try that new Indian place Morrison’s always talking about.”
He follows her through the doors, close like always. Probably no closer than usual, but for some reason, she’s warm before they even reach the elevator.
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“You want the Sprite or the Diet Coke? They were out of everything else.”
Kathy looks up from the three-month-old issue of People she probably wasn’t reading. “Diet Coke.” She takes the can and pops the top, drinking a few large swallows before she asks, “What’d the doctor say about Olivia?”
Elliot shrugs out of his trench coat, inhaling the combination of bleach and stale coffee that permeates the hospital waiting room. “They don’t know anything new.”
He sits down. God he’s so fucking tired. “She has a concussion. They’re running a few more tests to make sure it’s nothing worse.” He sighs, running his hands over his chin and trying to remember the last time he shaved. Tuesday maybe? “You know more about this stuff than I do.”
“El, it’s standard procedure. CT and MRI to make sure there’s no skull fracture or bleeding in her brain.” She’s looking right at him, and no matter how hard he searches, the only thing he can find in her eyes is concern. He wonders when the hell that happened, when they all accepted this for what it is.
Kathy sips her soda and flips through the magazine. Something about the Kardashian sisters. He settles into one of the cheaply upholstered taupe chairs, leaving a seat between them because her purse and a stuffed manila folder occupy that space. He twists a button on his shirt and finally picks up the B section of the Times, three days old.
“Did they say when you can see her?” Kathy’s leafing through the contents of the folder now, not looking at him.
“Probably a few hours. I guess the MRI takes a while.”
“Yeah.” She flips the file shut and reaches for her purse. “Unless you want me to stay, I’m gonna help Maureen with that blood drive she’s trying to organize.” Kathy pauses, as if she’s not sure whether to stop or continue speaking. “I don’t know if she’s talked to you, but she’s pretty stressed out about it.”
He’s silent. Maureen hasn’t said a word about the blood drive, probably because whenever she’s called lately he’s talked to her for two minutes and then made some excuse to hang up. He makes himself look at Kathy. “I’ll call her tonight.”
“Thanks.” She rummages in her purse and pulls out pale pink lipstick, which she applies without even looking in a mirror. He’s seen Olivia with lipstick, but he blanks on whether he’s ever witnessed her in the act of applying it. “Call me if anything changes and I’ll come right back.” Kathy leans forward and drops a kiss on his forehead, gesture of habit so ingrained it’s meaningless.
“Okay. I’m only gonna stay here until they let me see her.”
She smiles. “It’s just me and Eli tonight, so if you can’t make it for dinner, it’s fine.”
She walks past him, taking with her the same citrus scent she’s worn since he met her in high school. He remembers the first time he came inside her, the crazy rush, his face in her neck, gasping with release and euphoria as he breathed in the smell he had no way of knowing then he’d associate with her forever.
He’s glad now that he didn’t know anything, then.
He swallows half the Sprite in a few gulps; the carbonation stings as it goes down. Then he fits himself into the chair as best he can and waits for the doctor to materialize and tell him he can talk to Olivia.
It’s not comfortable – the cushion’s too soft and the metal structure behind the upholstery pushes his back the wrong way.
It works for now.
He waits some more.
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Date: 2010-06-01 04:46 am (UTC)I'll totally come back when I calm down my SQUEEEEING to a tolerable level, but for now, THIS:
She needs to work less and get laid more.
I fucking love you! :)
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Date: 2010-06-01 04:52 am (UTC)But I'm glad it made you squee, because that was at least my very very very faint hope:)
And shit. The woman DOES need to work less and get laid more. Even Elliot gets it when he wants some. Might not be from the person he wants it from but still. Geez. It's all so unfair. Meh.
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Date: 2010-06-01 04:54 pm (UTC)You captured season one Elliot and Olivia SO well. Seriously, I felt like I was watching it.
He’s clicking the tip of his pen in that spastic way he does when he’s running on adrenaline, caffeine, and Munchkins. She sort of wants to hit him, but he looks pathetic. It would take too much energy anyway.
LOVE. I am a big fan of sarcastic Liv, and you have her voice down perfectly. And the way you used the popcorn prompt was excellent. "Also, bite me." Oh, Liv. :)
Heee, Choose Your Own Adventure books...I used to have about a million of those! Also, I possibly wrote an SVU smutlet last night before I read this about Elliot being a space heater, so it made me chuckle that you used that idea also.
Oh, man. Kathy and Elliot. There was something so lovely and yet incredibly sad about that last prompt.
This was just awesome. Thank you so much for being such a good sport and willing to write them for those of us still languishing in this effing fandom. :)
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Date: 2010-06-01 05:07 pm (UTC)I'm glad you were feeling the S1! Of all these, that one was the most fun in terms of a mental place to hang out. It's kinda like I had forgotten how amusing they used to be before everything was tense and augh and angst and woe. The lightness. So I was trying for that there and I'm glad it worked for you.
I used to LOVE those Choose Your Own Adventure books, but I'd get so mad when I died. LOL. Also, keeling over that we both wrote Elliot as a space heater. I think Meloni just kind of has that presence, you know? Where is this smutlet of which you speak, btw? *bats eyes*
I was terrified to write Kathy and Elliot, because I have never once hated Kathy. I think she gets such a bad rap from so many in the fandom. Just as it's not Elliot and Olivia's fault the writers are morons, neither is it hers, so whenever I write her, I want her as real as I can possibly make her -- not the snarky bitch impediment cartoon she winds up in a lot of fanfic. That shit pisses me right off, as you can probably tell from how I'm ranting about it. Hee.
Dude in the end this was honestly fun. I needed the mental exercise of putting myself in a completely difference space. I'm not half as good at them as I'd like to be, but I'm really glad you enjoyed it:)
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Date: 2010-06-01 05:16 pm (UTC)Haha, the number of EO icons I have chilling on my hard drive is, well, excessive, to say the least. ;)
I cleaned out my mom's attic and basement before she moved out to Chicago and I found box after box of all my childhood books, including a ridiculous number of Choose Your Own Adventure. I really wanted to keep them because they were so much a part of my childhood, but in the end I decided that donating them was the right choice. I kept two or three and I hope the rest of them found a good home.
I haven't posted the smutlet just yet...gotta polish it a bit more and definitely needs a beta, lol. No idea where it came from...I think now that I've gotten some distance from the show, I'm remembering how much I really love EO.
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Date: 2010-06-01 04:47 am (UTC)I love the way you mix in scent memories and really random things like wishing you could buy confidence at 7-11.
I can't remember who is who on the show, but you captured Eliot well.
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Date: 2010-06-01 04:54 am (UTC)Thank you for reading even though I know it's entirely not your thing. And don't feel bad. I can't remember who's who on the show either;) Don't tell anybody, okay?
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Date: 2010-06-01 05:35 am (UTC)I finished my Epic Fic of Marty Stu-ness tonight. Thank god. Now I can do something else. It's not going to win any awards, but it pleases me. Because Jack + Mounties = Win! in my little head. IDK when I'll post the last chapter.
Looky! It's Kiefer in a kilt! Mmmmmm.....
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Date: 2010-06-01 11:35 am (UTC)I'm so glad you finished the fic! Boy do I know what it's like to have one eating your brain, given that I'm always always in that situation. If I can stay awake long enough (thunderstorms like ALL night -- ugh) I'm gonna catch up today. I hope!
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Date: 2010-06-01 02:28 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-06-01 06:04 am (UTC)I know I say this all the time, but all the details you include enhance your stories SO much. The muscle in the side of Elliot's neck, his shoulders beginning to relax, the sugary aftertaste of the 7-Up- you always draw attention to things that I feel like most people would probably overlook when trying to picture these situations, but would notice if they were actually in them, and that's one of the many things that makes your writing so amazing. Everything is just so real.
that cocky confidence she wishes she could purchase in the candy aisle at 7-11. She pictures it in a shiny package, next to the Snickers and Whatchamacallits. How do you come up with these ideas? So cool.
kinetic energy and perpetual motion You and your awesome phrasing!!
She needs to work less and get laid more. Hehehe. A+ advice. XD
Probably no closer than usual, but for some reason, she’s warm before they even reach the elevator. Awww, this line made me happy and smushy! *squee*
I don't even have words to express how I feel about the last prompt, except for the fact that this was an absolutely perfect way to describe the uncomfortableness of being in a hospital waiting room.
These are so awesome! You're making me start to love these characters despite the fact that I've barely seen this show- even more proof of what a brilliant writer you are. ♥
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Date: 2010-06-01 08:01 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-06-01 12:21 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-06-01 12:20 pm (UTC)Squee! That's such a fabulous compliment, Cinna, because I try so hard to put myself in the situations I'm writing about and think what I would notice.
You're so sweet to comment on fic about people you don't watch or care about. The weird thing with this one was that I tried to cover eleven years by skipping from place to place, so I'm not sure how that worked. I also spent the whole time worried that I'd screwed up canon because I haven't watched for so long!
Anyway, THANK YOU!!! Your comments always give me the goofiest smile. Mixed with coffee, best morning ever! &hearts
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Date: 2010-06-01 01:24 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-06-01 02:31 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-06-01 01:36 pm (UTC)Things I loved about the second one: Heat shimmering off the sidewalk in translucent waves, zero to Mach 2, sarcastic imaginary quotes, that she makes him regain control of the situation, work less and get laid more, or vibrator!!!fun, choose your own adventure and how AWESOME that analogy was, including the perfect wording, the way you bring the pen-chewing back, that he surprises her by jumping at the dinner invitation, that they're SO S6 THEM!!
Things I loved about the third one: That he's bringing Kathy soda and knows she probably wasn't reading the People magazine she has, "stale coffee the permeates the hospital waiting room", the way there's just a dejected quality to him (worried but sorta eh about life in general), that she's genuinely concerned and telling him about standard procedures, He wonders when the hell that happened, when they all accepted this for what it is. GAH I loved that, the detail about Maureen and how he hasn't talked to her, that he's gonna wait until they let him see Olivia, "gesture of habit so ingrained it's meaningless OMG CAN I MARRY THAT LINE?, thinking about citrus and first!time sex and how he's so glad he didn't know...then...
Things I loved overall: The way you so perfectly depicted the the rise and fall of their relationship, your incredible details that make it all so real, the way you catch them in their younger years, not so jaded by life and the job and each other and have them bantering, then the angry!Elliot that happened somewhere in the middle, then the last section which is so damn resigned it's heartbreaking.
So yeah. Great job with this. You never cease to impress the fuck out of me.
& hearts you!
I don't have an SVU con. Huh.
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Date: 2010-06-01 02:49 pm (UTC)In any case, thank you for helping me make this trip down memory lane and for fielding my out of nowhere canon questions. I'm glad you liked all the things you liked about it. I liked um . . . the Choose Your Own Adventure thing! Heee.
You should steal your own SVU icon, because it rocks socks and says it all and then you never have need of another. I should be productive today and not 1) write about Jack and Renee in London 2) work on a Jack/Renee fanvid or 3) make moar Jack/Renee icons.
I am lame. Muah.
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Date: 2010-06-01 09:08 pm (UTC)She needs to work less and get laid more. Or at least spend more time with her vibrator and that warming gel she spent too much money on at Megan’s ridiculous sex toy party last week.
I seriously lost it when I read this and had to take a break to laugh! I love it. The warming gel is a nice touch. Oh, Liv. Yes, you do need to get laid more. A lot more.
Lately, dealing with Elliot reminds her of those Choose Your Own Adventure books she used to leaf through when she baby-sit in high school. The difference is that on a bad day, any approach to Elliot can land her on the metaphorical equivalent of the “Sorry, you’re dead” page.
Choose Your Own Adventure reference = awesome!
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Date: 2010-06-02 04:40 pm (UTC)I'm so glad I made you laugh! I like to include useful details;)
Thank you for the comment AND the prompt. It's good for me to try writing something that doesn't munch on my brain every now and then:)
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Date: 2010-06-01 09:37 pm (UTC)Man, I love these. The whole tone of the first one, how they're so kind of banter-y. "Also, bite me" and "violent mint" and how she calls him jackass and he says the guy she dates composes operas. The muscle in his neck and him turning without signaling, how attuned they are to each other's physicality.
And then in the second one: "most people would be wrong" and how not being able to predict him freaks her out and makes her job harder, how PRACTICAL that whole lie of thought it, him taking that moment to regain control of his body, the back of his NECK sweating, that made my heart do things.
AND THEN in mine how you made it that Elliot and Kathy are waiting for OLIVIA of all people, how Kathy is so calm and she kisses him and it doesn't even mean anything, that she's smelled the same since high school, that he's glad he didn't know then what he knows now, the whole complicated business of his relationship with his kids and does he talk to them or what, and those LAST TWO LINES, man. Way to nail it.
In conclusion: you are great, and I'm so glad you did these even though they were a pain in the balls. True story: now that I "can't" work on my prompts, they are ALL I WANT TO DO. I'm...having a little bit of a writing meltdown. Wah wah.
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Date: 2010-06-02 04:38 pm (UTC)No really this was an amazing exercise in putting my brain in a completely different place and I'm so glad I gave it a shot. Now uh, how do I still have 23 of these to go? Why can't I be like you? WOE!!!
I hear you on always wanting to work on what you can't/ought not. All my brain is doing at the moment is making up this epic shit about Jack and Renee in London, when really, I should be cranking out three of the XF prompts. But dude. NOVEL BOOT CAMP. It is time:) Talk to me about your writing meltdown whenever you want, okay? Because I am so here to listen to every last word. I swear.
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Date: 2010-06-02 05:54 pm (UTC)Also, the Backstreet boys! lololol!
I think you did a great job on these, bb! I can tell you put some effort in, even though your mind was on Jack and Renee and their AU adventure. :D
See? This meme is working already for you and driving you to be better! :)
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Date: 2010-06-02 06:07 pm (UTC)Well this entire alphabet meme thing was what I told you -- an exercise in forcing myself to write a little outside the box. For whatever these were, they didn't turn out like my Jack/Renee stuff, so at least there's that. I can't help what Jack and Renee do in the back of my head while I'm working on other things, because they're fucking stubborn and they ignore me and give me the finger all the time;)
But I agree that this meme is kind of the grooviest thing ever, even though now I'm scared as fuck to write XF. Woe! Thank you so much for the awesome comment!
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Date: 2010-06-02 09:29 pm (UTC)Hehehe. Yep. I'm popping up out of nowhere just to say, that is funny. (Also kind of crazy, buuut... ;) Just kidding. I'm glad you're nuts. Because it's fun to read the products of your insanity. The fruits of your crazy loom. Whoa...I sound a little crazy now, so I'm gonna stop.) :)
P.S. "Elliot and Olivia, whooo, good writing." <--my attempt to be on topic :)
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Date: 2010-06-02 11:32 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-06-06 09:02 pm (UTC)Sooo, this may not be the appropriate forum to voice this in, as I don't wish to take anything away from the actual subject of the entry, BUT. I don't have any other way to tell you so I'll say it here: I eagerly await Round 2 or 3 or whichever one finally busts out the Jack & Renee stuff, because your J/R stories are like warm sunshine amid the bleak & dreary landscape that is my life.
Crack to an addict.
Booze to a drunk.
You get the picture. ;)
Now did you really need to know that? Nope. TMI? Possibly. But I had to say it - I was practically compelled - so I transfer all blame from myself to the addictive quality of your writing. :)
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Date: 2010-06-07 12:25 am (UTC)Round two is all Jack/Renee, and hopefully four of the prompts if I can get my ass in gear. The current plan is to do Babysitting, Glock, Recovery, and Vacation, given that I have ideas for all of them. The trick is to 1) find time to sit down and write and 2) be in the right frame of mind when I do have time. It's a pain in the ass. But I'm hoping to get at least one of them done tomorrow, and I'm more wildly excited than I should admit about the prospect of being back to writing Jack and Renee.
My love for them is so fucking unhealthy.
But seriously you are too sweet to compare my fics to crack. I hope whatever I come up with next lives up to your expectations -- I live in constant fear that I will disappoint. Woe!
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Date: 2010-06-07 09:48 pm (UTC)And when the time comes that you finally do move on, again, no worries. "For everything a season" and all that crap.
(As for "spouting lunatic conservative madness"? Bitch, please. <--Oops. Sorry. Forgot that whole social convention about "not swearing at strangers..." ::face gets red:: Okay, bye! *rushes out embarrassed*)
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Date: 2010-06-08 04:28 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2010-06-02 10:00 pm (UTC)no subject
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